you can almost believe this is writing

even though I’m
arranging
it differently
with hairpins
and cleft palates

you can almost
understand
what i’m saying
as i roll out
my rouge stick

in my purse
a peanut
butter cup
will never
get stale

you can almost
know me
if you question
my heavy
tongue

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15 thoughts on “you can almost believe this is writing

  1. Short lines, a peanut butter cup (Reese’s?), and a hairpin. And the heavy tongue. Together they make a delightful poem, Angie. One that sets a person into thinking, making them to fit.
    ..

  2. My initial thought is crazy, so don’t think I’m loopy.

    In my past life, I was a hospital dietitian and worked with individuals and parents whose children had cleft palates. You captured their communication challenges in a very striking manner – roll out, heavy tongue..I know you were writing about writing…but the literal parts of this work, too.

    I love how you can tell a story (or 2 or 3) in so few words. Amazing.

    1. Michelle, I sat in on an IEP meeting for a student with a cleft palate, so I was being pretty literal as well as figurative. Repetition is the key until his next surgery. Practice, practice, practice just like with anything else

  3. I like the tension you create between words spoken and underlying meaning, the mundane and the artistic. Your opening lines set this up in a brilliant fashion.

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